Fairy Princess Charm School
Fairy princess charm school
Once apon a time there was a girl called blair willows she works in a bakers shop. She came home and brought some hot tea for her mother. Her sister emily was watching charm school there was delancy on TV and her mother.delancy had to vote who had to come to charm school.Blair little sister posted a envilope that had blairs name on it. Delancy spinned the wheel she was looking for a envilope then she found Blairs letter she said Blairs name out when Blair heard her name she got shocked her little sister cheerd Blair was not quite shore she said mom I am not shore that I can do this her mum said you have been voted you have to go.the man came emily looked out the window and said WOW you get to ride in a carage Blair. Blair said I will not let you down.emily gave her a big hug.Blair sat in a carage first she had tea that spilt then she put some lipstick the carage wheel hit a rock and the lipstick went on her face finaly they arived at charm school. Blair went inside a dog came and licked her the dogs name was prince he was a royal dog.the head came and the said welcome to charm school we usely dont find new students on the floor.the head showed Blair all around.a little pink fairy came holding cupcake the head said this is your helper fairy the fairy said every student has there own helper fairy. the fairy showed her locker there was evrything there to be a princess Delancy came the perfume went all around Delancy she got angry Blair said it was a acsidant I am really sorry.delancy got really angry then she told her freind give me a pepper mint wash.the little helper fairy said lets get you dressed in your uniform.the curtains open blair went in the curtains wen blair came out and the uniform was really pritty with a tie.the little fairy said do you like it Blair said I love it.the little fairy showed her room with two kind girls one plays football one makes up songs.the football girl said do you play football Blair said no the girl kicked the ball the music girl fell.Blair said I am really sorry .after a wile it was lunchtime Blair got lunch with her freinds.she sat down with her freinds Delancy is so rude that she told her fairy that put the table blanket in her skirt wen she gets up she is going she is going to drop evrything.when Blair got up and evrything fell.Blair got really upset and she said I have to go to my room delancys mum laughed when the head was standing next to her.after they were practsing putting books on there head Blair was about to do it but delancy put her shoe and Blair tripped over.
February 8th, 2012 at 12:51 pm
Well done Humaira, you have done really well to tell a story that held my interest. Remember that many of your readers won’t know about Charm School, so it would have been great to read some description of what it looked like when Blair arrived at the school.
February 8th, 2012 at 2:39 pm
Brilliant, Humaira has taken the feedback and was really chuffed to have a comment from the King of Blogging.
Thanks
Steve
February 8th, 2012 at 1:01 pm
fairy charm school
*wow i cant believe a year 3 wrote this its great to no you remebered the story.
*you wrote a lot well done
i realy like this well done also i have seen the story before and i have to say you described it very well im realy impressed
February 8th, 2012 at 1:01 pm
Good story
Good description
This is good for a Year 3
February 8th, 2012 at 1:02 pm
Wow are you really in Year 3! This is absolutley brilliant and is fantastically long.
February 8th, 2012 at 2:29 pm
Hello Mr Hall and everyone in Blue 3.
This is Mr Perry at Brigshaw High School in Allerton Bywater, Leeds. I am an friend of Mr Hall and we really like your blog. I have asked a couple of my Year 7 classes to put some comments on your blog and they were really pleased about this.
We’ll be coming back soon to see how you are getting on.
February 8th, 2012 at 2:31 pm
Hello my name is Amy. Your story is very good, but you could remember to put Capital letters and commas to space out your sentences. Remember to check it for spelling mistakes just before you post it too.
February 8th, 2012 at 2:47 pm
Hello,
Well Done
I really like your story! I can see all of your class is writing stories; I like writing them too. I like the name Blair and I like buns so maybe she could make some for me! AMAZING! Keep writing stories!
February 8th, 2012 at 2:51 pm
You had good detail.
You have a good piece of work for a year 3/4.
February 8th, 2012 at 2:54 pm
Hello my name is Samuel. Your story is very good and it has a lot of great detail however you might need to remember to put in Capital letters, Full stops and Finger Spaces. It might help if you check some silly spelling mistakes.
Well done
From Samuel
February 9th, 2012 at 12:03 pm
Hi I really like your blog, good story with gripping parts but I have heard this story on a programme
still well done!
February 9th, 2012 at 12:09 pm
Hi my name is Elle. Your story is very good, but just remember to put, Capital leters and full stops very well done.
February 9th, 2012 at 12:10 pm
I really enjoyed reading your story, but you could remember to put capital letters and commas to space out your sentences. To improve on your story could you check your spelling mistakes before posting it.
February 9th, 2012 at 12:18 pm
good story
good description
good for a3 year old
March 2nd, 2012 at 5:09 pm
Nice blog.I like your story.How long did it take you to write it?
Gabriela